I take a single step on the moon
I am then up like helium in a balloon,
I get back in my ship,
Then my belt goes clip
Steering wheel turning
My chest is now burning.
Hope you liked it.
Sunday, December 22, 2019
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Kia ora Maia, this is Kieryn from the Summer Learning Journey.
ReplyDeleteYou have done a fantastic job creating this poem on how you would feel if you stood on the moon!
It was a great idea for you to highlight the different rhyming words in separate colours, and I think it is really awesome how you wrote the poem in first person as it gives your poem a more personal feel.
‘I take a single step on the moon
I am then up like helium in a balloon’ is a great first line as it gives mention to the gravity up in space.
I thought the final lines of ‘Steering wheel turning
My chest is now burning’ were awesome to finish on as they left me asking questions about the poem.
Why was his chest burning? Was he nervous or excited?
Did he travel all the way to the moon by himself?
If you ever got the opportunity to go to the moon, would you go?
If you could reply to this comment and let me know, that would be great!
Nga mihi